１）タクシーの うえにこどもが いませんよ There's no child on top of the taxi. ２）おんがくは すきいが、ダンスは へたですよ I love music but I can't dance. ３）カラオケお しませんでした しずかです We didn't do Karaoke it's quiet.
Hi! I'm Ayaka. Do you like making せんりゅう? You could make good senryu! That's good! Do you know KIGO? KIGO is a word which means seasons. For example, まつり is KIGO of summer. Please use KIGO when you meke せんりゅう. And I want to read your せんりゅう more! I'm looking forword to read new one. がんばってね！またきます♪
The first two senryu sound interesting because both of them end with a sentence final particle よ. I think you had utilized the effect of よ and made your senryu sound even more interesting.
If you got a chance later, you might wanna add English translation next to your original Japanese senryuu. and since senryu is a piece of artwork(not short composition), you do not really need to put any comma or period after each sentence.
Hi! I'm Ayaka.
ReplyDeleteDo you like making せんりゅう?
You could make good senryu! That's good!
Do you know KIGO?
KIGO is a word which means seasons.
For example, まつり is KIGO of summer.
Please use KIGO when you meke せんりゅう.
And I want to read your せんりゅう more!
I'm looking forword to read new one.
がんばってね！またきます♪
Hi! My name is Takuya.
ReplyDeleteI think making せんりゅう is very difficult.
But,your せんりゅう is very nice!
Nihongo is a little difficult language.
But,it is very very interesting language!!
がんばってください！
おもしろいせんりゅうですね！
ReplyDeleteThe first two senryu sound interesting
because both of them end with
a sentence final particle よ.
I think you had utilized the effect of
よ and made your senryu sound even more
interesting.
If you got a chance later,
you might wanna add English
translation next to your original
Japanese senryuu. and since senryu is a
piece of artwork(not short composition),
you do not really need to put any comma or period after each sentence.
はじめの せんりゅうが おもしろいです。
ReplyDelete＊＊せんりゅうは ５−７−５ですね。
せんりゅうがおもしろいです。わたしもはやおみやざきがすきです。はやおみやざきがとてもすごいです。わたしのちちもとてもすきですからわたしのうちへビデオがおおいです。
ReplyDeleteこんにちは！
ReplyDelete初めまして！
ジェイドです。
第二番の川柳がすきです〜
おもしろかった！
じゃ、また！
ジェフさんのせんりゅはおもしろいです。わたしはジェフのきげんわかりません。にばんのせんりゅはあじですね。
ReplyDeleteわたしはあなたのせんりゅう１がよくすきですね。とてもおもしろいですから。そしてユーモアがたくさんありますよ。
ReplyDeleteユーモアがありますから、とてもおもしろいせんりゅですね。
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